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DizzasterJuice
16th Jun 2014, 11:20 PM
Some of the educated Mag Leung can count, read and write. The royalty class maintain power by denying education to the lower classes. The guards can't count.
Steven-Vincent
8th May 2015, 5:06 PM
After reading this I went back to the battle scene in the throne room. I had not realized the king was dying there in the background. Missed that. Also, I think I am still having trouble figuring out how much time is going by between pages.
DizzasterJuice
8th May 2015, 6:15 PM
At first I was trying to simulate the time disorientation from being underground. I only talked about the time passed when they weren't underground. But it turns out that it's way too confusing so I'm making that timeline graphic now.
Steven-Vincent
8th May 2015, 9:12 PM
I know it's hard when we, as writers, are trying to convey the sense of disorientation to the reader. But I think we have to find some way to show the disorientation of the character without confusing the reader too.
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