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DizzasterJuice
28th May 2014, 11:15 AM
5/29 - edited page
Well of course Yokai lives in a tree in the jungle. =)
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DizzasterJuice
28th May 2014, 6:05 PM
She was supposed to take them off and put them on the table with her other weapons in frame 3 but I screwed up and left them on in frame 4. I can't believe I didn't notice it.
I'm fixing it... eventually. Done!
xpacetrue
29th May 2014, 12:47 AM
The renders look gorgeous, as usual. And the story is interesting. (Very similar names... They are sisters, correct? Just very friendly, or incest? Are most such siblings this friendly?)
Two very minor nitpicks, though:
1) I was about to mention the neckblades, also, but someone beat me to it.
2) Those steps on the spiral staircase do not seem realistic. By that, I mean it does not seem feasible from an engineering perspective. (I took Structural Engineering 101 in college. And I did pass.)
If the entire staircase was made of metal, both the pole and the steps, it -might- be possible. Even then, that's a -lot- of stress to put on the weld or junction between the steps and the pole. But wood planks nailed to a wood pole like that? It could never hold someone's weight!
Well... it might if perfectly-shaped groves could be cut out of the pole and the steps were embedded deep inside it. Even then, those thin steps would very likely break when you put your weight near the end.
Most spiral staircases have rails or some structure on the outside of the steps to help bear the load. Either that, or they would have braces or something under each step to help support the weight.
DizzasterJuice
29th May 2014, 2:30 AM
They are not sisters. Their relationship will be explained on Sunday's page and in more detail next week. However, all the Dalai are related in some way. Yokai was telling the truth when she said the population is below sustainable numbers.
The story of the Dalai is based on the Seminole Tribe and the Florida panther. More on that next week too.
DizzasterJuice
29th May 2014, 5:48 PM
Thanks.
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