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Steven-Vincent
6th May 2015, 5:16 PM
I'm a little confused here. How did Natty come to know so much about this alien society so quickly? She seems much more knowledgeable about secret ways out of town, culture, etc, than I would expect at this stage.
DizzasterJuice
6th May 2015, 6:27 PM
On page 102 --> There are a lot of books written in English lying around. The Leung can't read them so they have no idea what's in them. Except for Bibles, Tyranos had them destroyed. One of the books Natty read was on the city's construction. I cut a lot of the boring content from my original story for this webcomic but I probably shouldn't have cut that part huh. lol
Also, it took them weeks to get to this point. Someone suggested that I make a timeline so I'm doing that this weekend and hopefully have it posted by Monday.
Steven-Vincent
6th May 2015, 8:48 PM
It definitely does not seem like weeks. Maybe because I am binge-reading it and did not read it little by little as you put it out, but it seemed like a few days, max, not weeks and weeks. But yeah, you should show stuff like that. Even if it is just a panel. Or have them ask "How did you know this?" and she could say "I read about it... I'll explain later" and then explain after they escape. Or something. Otherwise it seems like the knowledge just popped into her head.
DizzasterJuice
6th May 2015, 9:30 PM
On page 51 Kaydee calculated that it would take 17 days, 20 hours for the storm to pass. Then on page 105 there's a dialogue that says that the feast was "weeks earlier".
Still, I'm not doing a very good job of conveying the timeline in the story so I'm just going to chart it out in a diagram.
Steven-Vincent
6th May 2015, 11:13 PM
I knew it would take weeks for the storm to pass. I just had not picked up that the storm had already finished and gone by. I thought it was still going. That's why I asked earlier if they were on the surface... I was wondering where the storm was.
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