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cattservant
23rd Oct 2013, 6:05 PM

[Excellent Page.]
Boat and Water
And the Wildlife.
Information,
Inter species
Innuendo
And that Feline
Psychology!

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DizzasterJuice
23rd Oct 2013, 6:13 PM

Thanks. I'm not sure if the commander is a little creeped out or turned on by Liri wrapping her tail around his arm.

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cattservant
23rd Oct 2013, 6:24 PM

Was it Lady Eloma or the Commander who was
"WTF?!!"-ing?

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DizzasterJuice
23rd Oct 2013, 6:38 PM

Lady Eloma...like she can't believe that Liri just did that...or possibly even jealous.

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cattservant
23rd Oct 2013, 6:47 PM

Cats are Cats!

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CyberSkull
24th Oct 2013, 1:10 AM

So, uh, bigger boat? Please?

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DizzasterJuice
24th Oct 2013, 1:24 PM

Heheh...Yeah we're going to need a bigger boat!
If the boat is about 10 meters without the whisker poles then the water dragon is at least 9 meters (29.5').

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CyberSkull
24th Oct 2013, 1:10 AM

Also, panel 4 means panel 4.

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jas
24th Oct 2013, 2:00 PM

Very nice page. I especially like the last frame. :)

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DizzasterJuice
24th Oct 2013, 6:31 PM

tyvm!

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Qwent
25th Oct 2013, 9:46 AM

So Becky is a slayer... who killed a baby dragon... No! She killed Spike! :)

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DizzasterJuice
25th Oct 2013, 11:19 AM

Yay! You found an Easter egg - "Buffy the Vampire Slayer".
Cattservant found one but can't say what until that part of the plot is revealed.
No one has found the others yet.

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cattservant
25th Oct 2013, 8:53 PM

Doesn't mean he knows he did it though...

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MaiLyng
23rd Jan 2015, 10:29 AM

Pesky ol' dragons, sneakin' around and such.

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World feels real

Steven-Vincent
28th Apr 2015, 11:26 PM

I like what you are doing here. This world feels like a real place, with rules and natural laws and a people with its own culture... and you have done this in just a small number of pages. Very nice.

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DizzasterJuice
29th Apr 2015, 1:52 PM

Thank you very much!
There's a few pages thrown in here and there about the geography and culture. Like Page 197 and Weapons

I don't consider myself a very good writer, so as a result, I think I lose some readers right about the time the story splits and covers several different aspects of events on the same planet. I've never had a full critique of this story so I'm not sure.

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Steven-Vincent
29th Apr 2015, 5:20 PM

So far I think the writing has been good. I think there is a good mix of panels w/dialogue and panels with few/no words. The story has kept me interested. I'll be honest, I have little patience for bad writing, so I would not have made it this far if you were not a decent writer.

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DizzasterJuice
29th Apr 2015, 6:04 PM

Thanks. Let me know if it starts getting bad though. I would like to fix whatever doesn't work.

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